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Old 14-04-2015, 01:27 PM   #17
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Originally Posted by alf hearted View Post
There's not enough sex in your story. You've got to spice it up a bit if you want to keep the reader's attention. Can't Angelina Jolie and Brad Pitt be thrown into the mix, with Simon being the man using his immense charm to steal her from Brad and set up his own world govt?
If I had one question I could ask Simon it would be "Do you find your alien lover sexy... beautiful?"

I assume that's her in the bottom left corner. I don't know about you , Alf and rooey, but , I might be hard pressed to father a child with her .

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