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brainfreeze
15-02-2009, 02:13 AM
A Work In Progress....


“Stop it you son of a “ Maddy slipped from Mark’s grip and slid behind the bathroom door, turning the key to his fists weighing heavy on the other side of it. She slid down the cold tiled wall to the floor, cursing Mark beneath her breath, berating herself for his distress.
If only dinner was ready when he got in. If only baby wasn't crying. If only.
If only she had found those cigarette butts he hid above the door frame this morning, and in the very pillow slip on which she slept while he was up, and the stub left under the front door mat. A little trap, another test, set before going to work, failed by her, again. The lazy cow!
The least she can do is see that the house is spotless. It’s all he asks of her. She can do that, surely? It’s not even that she has to do it herself. She doesn’t. She has a maid for God sake. She only need instruct. Can’t she do that?
The sting of his palm throbs in her face against the water splashed on the ache. She should have listened to her flat mate way back. Before she moved in and married Mark, and had a baby with him. Back when Desire walked in on Mark with Maddy pinned to his big double bed in a passionate grip, telephone cored stretched and wrapped around her neck, Desire warned then that Mark was bad news. Maddy should have listened.
Mark is in the bath, door open, he is simmering down. Baby, thankfully has stopped crying and is sleeping angelically in his cot, like Maddy thought he would do before she had him, but mostly he doesn’t, he SHRIEKS. Neither of them get much sleep. Maddy gambled with the vacuum cleaner waking baby up as she gently pulled his bedroom door shut.
She is cleaning up. Sucking up small shards and splinters of glass a broom might miss, like the missile Mark launched at her head did, shattering itself against a print of a couple captured in a rare moment of tenderness, caught in a kiss. She doesn’t want the sharp edges of the debris to hurt the infant.
The whine of the machine has a hypnotic effect, tuning the tone of her surroundings down to a heavy hum, vibrating against the pain in the back of her head that has formed a lump. Hose in hand Maddy sets to work on what she doesn’teven realise until she actually carries it out, is her plan and intent.
She lays the pipe in her hand down gently, leaving the cleaner running and silently treads to the kitchen and back, returning with scissors in hand. Stooping to turn the vacuum cleaner off at the wall, she cuts the extension cord at the belly of the machine, like a midwife does the umbilical cord of a new born baby at birth, only these hands intend another kind of deliverance. Gently handling the severed end of the electric cord Maddy flicks the plug back on at the wall and stands up. She carries the live wire like a flame she doesn’t want to go out on a dark night to the bathroom and plunges it into the water with Mark.
“What the…” Mark yelped as the electricity popped with a thunder clap and the lights went out. The grey extension cord trailed from the wall, hanging limp in the grey afternoon light spilling through the window above the tub. The electric cable came to rest just below the water line, beneath a blackened scorch permanently etched into the bath with a bang, marking the moment of Maddy’s madness.
“Thank God I’m a ‘Luck-trician” Mark sneered in disbelief spilling from the bath.
“What the fuck are you doing? That hurt - no - it bloody tingled -HARD” Mark growled, towelling himself down vigourously. Then he backhanded a wide eyed cowering Maddy for her the harm she intended, the ungrateful bitch. Stamping passed her to reset the fuse box at the kitchen door, he commanded she following him.
“That is the trip switch, you stupid bitch” he educated her, calling a truce on today’s war games, already planning what lay next.
“Try that again and see what happens” he warns.
Shoulder earrings, eggshell carpets and verbal switch blades are the loving sentiments of their marriage. Mark knows Maddy's vulnerablilities and he exploits them. Neither he nor Maddy are fully aware that he does this. Maddy makes things worse when she retaliates back like this. Maddy is comfortably familiar with the prickling of Mark’s presence, to the extent that she misses Mark when she isn’t with him. They are oblivious to the self-destructive cycle they are in. She wants to please him.
Mark is right. Maddy is mad. Look what she just did! She has a lot to make up for after this. What if Mark threw her out? Where would she go? What would she do? She is lucky to have him, Mark reminds her. She had better watch herself, learn to be a good wife, try. That’s not too much to ask. Is it?

onourwayto2012
15-02-2009, 05:27 AM
Holy cow freeze....hope this is pure fiction....regardless, it's GREAT writing..... post some more!

brainfreeze
15-02-2009, 05:48 AM
Holy cow freeze....hope this is pure fiction....regardless, it's GREAT writing..... post some more!

Ah, is fiction reality or reality fiction?

That would be the question on a forum like this;)

Thanks for the compliment on my work. :)

onourwayto2012
16-02-2009, 05:34 AM
Ah, is fiction reality or reality fiction?

That would be the question on a forum like this;)



Thanks for the compliment on my work. :)

Ahhh...well is it both?..... or is it neither??
good stuff...gonna continue????

brainfreeze
16-02-2009, 09:06 AM
Ahhh...well is it both?..... or is it neither??
good stuff...gonna continue????

I got married young. I was 20, he was 27. My first husband was a violent alcoholic. I believed it was my fault. It took six years for me to realise I'd married my father.

What I wrote up there? Yes, it happened. His second wife shot him for his bullying. The last I heard he was on wife number 4.

Yes I'm going to continue. I was hoping to have it finished by the end of April, but it looks like the summer may be more realistic.

debs67gb
16-02-2009, 09:20 AM
blimey thats bloody good writing brain :)

I sometimes wish I could put my life into words in such a way that you have - well done ;-)

brainfreeze
16-02-2009, 09:25 AM
blimey thats bloody good writing brain :)

I sometimes wish I could put my life into words in such a way that you have - well done ;-)


Thanks debs. I believe if you can relate a story to your mates and hold their full attention for 10 minutes, you can write. Just write as you speak. Use the voice you used to captivate your friends to write in, don't try write like someone else.

Give it a go. I've had major healing since fictionalising my autobiography. I learned to love me.

debs67gb
16-02-2009, 09:28 AM
lmao some of my friends may not understand my wonderful dulcit North Yorkshire accent but it may be worth a try - I did try once but wasnt in a great position emotionally to continue...

I was reading some of my 6 year old son's writing last night - he's at the age where he writes as he speaks - I've never seen vampire spelt vampigher but made me smile :)

brainfreeze
16-02-2009, 09:35 AM
lmao some of my friends may not understand my wonderful dulcit North Yorkshire accent but it may be worth a try - I did try once but wasnt in a great position emotionally to continue...

I was reading some of my 6 year old son's writing last night - he's at the age where he writes as he speaks - I've never seen vampire spelt vampigher but made me smile :)

This has taken over 5 years to write, because of the emotional content. It sometimes left me in a very bad place. In the long run it's worth it. When you write about it you are forced to look at it at all angles, something we don't generally do when we're living the situation. For the most part we put the bad things to the back of our minds when it's over. But to readress them is to look the monster in it's face.

I can see why your son spelt vampire as he did. Clever boy. Sweet. :)

brainfreeze
21-02-2009, 10:09 PM
Standing side on Maddy examined herself in the full length mirror. Her attention focused on her protruding swollen belly. She struggled to zip the skirt she was wearing, the same one she wore just last week. It had fit her then.

“You look pregnant” Kat commented, catching Maddy’s eye in the mirror as she walked in.

“Funny. You buy my sanitary pads. Work that one out. I’m bloated.” Maddy retorted sarcastically, irritated at the innuendos of her step-mother’s comment.

Maddy’s period hadn’t stopped since it came in. That’s when the bed-wetting suddenly came to an end. Maddy was never sure if she was going to wake up in warm wee or sticky blood.

In the children’s home the Matrons had stitched empty cotton spools into the hems of her pyjamas in an attempt to wake her up to stop the accidents. But that didn’t work. Neither did waking Maddy up during the night to take her to the toilet themselves. Making her sleep in it didn’t help either. They ended up throwing her into ice cold baths when they ran out of ideas and patience and finally gave up.

The wetting stopped when Maddy’s menstrual cycle kicked in with a vengeance. Unlike other girls the dreaded cursed didn’t visit only once a month. It hung around for months on end. Kat knew this. How could she believe Maddy was pregnant?

“Call me Virgin Mary” Maddy mocked.

Maddy’s neck whipped at the sting of Kat’s palm on the side of her face. She paused, caught unaware, eyes tearing, before reacting instinctively and striking Kat back.

“Wait till your father hears about this!” Kat shrieked. She hadn’t expected Maddy to hit her back. She was infuriated. She grabbed Maddy by the hair as Maddy made to leave the room and slapped her for it, again and again and again.

Maddy knew not to smack back. She would only make matters worse. She saw what father did to Boet when he got into a fight with Kat while father was away at work.

It was Maddy’s cigarette butt Kat found floating in the red plastic cup on the side of the bath. Maddy should have flushed it down the toilet. She forgot. Kat blamed Boet for it.

“Prove it’s mine. Come smell my breath, my cloths, and my hair.” Boet retorted, angry at being accused for something he didn’t do.

“I haven’t even bathed yet,” he yelled.

“I was in the bath last” Maddy owned up, too late, as Kat hissed at Boet, “I don’t have to PROVE anything to you, you cheeky fuck.”

That’s when Boet lobbed the Tupperware jug he had hold of at Kat, striking her square in the face with it, stopping her in her tracks. She told father when he got back from work.

Maddy cowered in the corner of their parent’s room while Kat watched through the netted window on the porch. The double bed represented a boxing ring over which Man and Boy skirted in between bursts of one-sided powerful jabs, punches and blows, followed by insults.

“Hey big man, come fight me you coward” father had roared at Boet.

“I can’t hit you, you’re my father” Boet cried back, blowing bubbles of snot and blood. The boy gasped, buckled, and then stood strong as father’s reply hit home.

“I’m not you’re father. My brother is.”

Maddy knew not to fight back. Kat burst the blood vessels in the palms of her hands causing them to swell and turn a mottled blue before a neighbour was alerted by Maddy’s screams and burst in to pull Kat off Maddy.

Bernie is divorced and lives at No 1 with her two young sons. She is a glamorous brunette who works at a salon down the road hairdressing. She took Kat back to her apartment for a nice cup of tea to calm her down and to have a chat, while Maddy and Boet stayed home creating a thousand scenarios, each one more frightening than the next of what will happen when father gets in and hears about this.

As it turned out, nothing happened. When the children went to bed that night Kat and father were still not home.


It was only once they were in the car driving down the highway on the other side of town heading toward the Bluff that Maddy suddenly remembered the pack of panties still in the wrapper that she forgot to bring.

“Here, now that you won’t wreck every pair you wear, I got you these.” Kat had said before Maddy left for school that morning.

A wrinkled doctor with droopy ear-lobes who Kat took Maddy to see shortly after their confrontation about Maddy being pregnant had prescribed the contraceptive pill for Maddy to sort her erratic period out with, and it worked. He also confirmed that Maddy was indeed as she had claimed to be, a virgin.

Bernie was taking Maddy away for the weekend to give both her and Kat a break, father said. They were on their way to Bernie’s boyfriend’s house on the beach. Maddy could hardly believe father and Kat had arranged this.

“Fancy a cigarette?” Bernie offered.

Suspicious because Bernie and Kat are now friends, at the same time feeling rather grown up Maddy accepted. Pushing the panty problem from thought, she clung to Bernie’s every word. Maddy is intrigued by her. Bernie is girly with a playful sense of dress. She doesn’t wear hand-me-downs like Kat and they all did. She didn’t treat Maddy like a kid. Bernie said Maddy could wear something of hers tonight. She would do Maddy’s hair and make-up and they’d go somewhere nice.

She also said, “you will be sharing the bed with me and Dave. Don’t worry. If he gets too frisky with you in his sleep it’s only because he thinks it’s me.” Bernie giggled steering the car down a sand road toward their destination. Maddy wasn’t sure if she heard Bernie right. But they pulled into a drive and a tall, tanned, blonde floppy haired bare chested surfer strode purposefully to greet them, before Maddy had time to ask.